Thursday, November 16, 2006

PG-13 Poetry ~*~ Virgin Cactus ~*~

I once read an article a long time ago on Georgia O'Keeffe, mentioning that she found flowers to be very sexual looking. I was young and got embarrassed the next time I saw one of her paintings. Recently, while browsing through the bookstore, I saw some poetry put to her art. I became intrigued and wondered Hhmmmmm...I can do that *blush* so, here is my first attempt at PG-13 poetry.


~*~ Virgin Cactus ~*~







Long after the first rain
I saw the pearls you captured
between your satin skin
and many jagged tines










I suddenly felt parched
my skin desired moisture
a craving turned to want
a tightening in my muscles










But I know the ache
that touching you requires
a piercing penetration
and the sting you'll leave behind

23 Comments:

Blogger Shaz said...

Your right you can do it.
That is amazing.
I love it really Love it.
xoxo :)

11:04 PM  
Anonymous ceanandjen said...

WOW! Shaz is right, you can indeed do it. The pictures so perfectly accompany the poem, and so much is said in such a few lines.

Beautiful!

xoxoxoxox

11:11 PM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

Gettin' us all hot and bothered! This is fabulous, darlin'. GORGEOUS. Thanks for being willing to be vulnerable and share :)

12:02 AM  
Blogger rising to the challenge said...

Wow... *giggle*
Explicit stuff here! It's great.
I love the photos and how they zoom out while your words 'zoom in'!
I love this new facet of yours that we're seeing here.
Vx

xoxox

2:01 AM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

Ouch!

Your cactus has sure got a prickle to it, Darlene- captures the bittersweet longings of desire just perfectly.

Great photos too...When are you going professional?!!

love x x x x x

4:04 AM  
Blogger Deb R said...

Yep, you did it all right! You captured perfectly that sense of knowing something (or someone!) is going to bring you pain, but being so overwhelmed with desire that in that one moment you must have it anyway. Hot! :-)

6:23 AM  
Anonymous Teresa Sheeley said...

OH yes, you can do this!!! Very very good. You are amazing. What a wonderful piece of art to read before I am off to work. Have a spectacular day Dar! Maybe you should spend today finding a publisher? Hmmm, just a thought :)

xxxxoooo
Teresa

7:04 AM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

Ooooooh. Will we be seeing you next to Georgie O'Keefe in the book stores soon?

7:16 AM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

mmmmm... :)

7:17 AM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

this is shiveringly wonderful, darlene. i agree with everything everybody has saying - you are a talent to be reckoned with...purr.

7:31 AM  
Blogger bronxbt said...

hi sweetie.
come see my contestants this week... they'll add a smile to your lovely face as well.

and yesh, as your fellow supporters state so adamenently, you CAN do it.

<< hugs >>

7:33 AM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

"PG-13 poetry" - I love it!

Very sexy stuff, girl, very sexy indeed.

7:42 AM  
Blogger The Whole Self said...

oh d.

oh this is great.

there's nothing i love more than my girl georgia o-

and it's so beautiful that she inspired your sexy words!

8:23 AM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

Blogger is vexing me with commenting today.

I will just say that my original comment was more effusive and I like what you've done here. Great job, Darlene!

10:36 AM  
Blogger Jane Poe (aka Deborah) said...

Very evocative! Brilliant job, Dar. How fun it is to push yourself as a poet ... love the passion - xoxo, d

11:38 AM  
Blogger la vie en rose said...

wow! great job! i'd love to know the name of that book. it sounds fabulous...and very sexy...

12:04 PM  
Blogger Trish Ryan said...

I have never seen a sexy poem featuring cactus photos. I don't think the two typically go together, which makes it all the more interesting.

12:14 PM  
Blogger Bohemian Girl said...

i also think it was clever to interwine an image of a cactus with sensuality and what it can bring up for some people.

and i smiled at the "PG-13" warning. ; )

love you sis.

1:29 PM  
Blogger bronxbt said...

hello again darling...

shhhhhh backatcha - it's actually a PIKA. a subspecies of the common field mouse, tho heavily um... padded against cold weather in the foothills of asia and other some regions in north america...

(more commonly mistaken for the canadian version, which of course is more difficult to pronounce: pika-eh)

giggle

2:24 PM  
Blogger Patry Francis said...

Very sensual and sensitive and beautiful all at the same time.

6:13 PM  
Blogger Turquoise CRO said...

Phew! I've got to go COOL off! LOL Hey! West Virginia's winning the Backyard Brawl!!! Woooo Hoooo! I LOVE Georgia!!!too! LOVE her red, RED poppy! Way to go Darlene! Hot, hot, HOT!!! Reminds me of that silly song, "I'm too sexy"

7:54 PM  
Blogger twitches said...

Okay, I'm only saying this because you said you wanted my critique, so:

I suddenly felt parched
my skin desired moisture
a craving turned to want
a tightening in my muscles

I think you could drop those last three lines and just leave it at feeling parched. To me that line is the absolute best, the heart of the poem, and you don't need the rest - it's just telling what that first line shows so very well:

Long after the first rain
I saw the pearls you captured
between your satin skin
and many jagged tines

I suddenly felt parched

But I know the ache
that touching you requires
a piercing penetration
and the sting you'll leave behind

Those other lines are just telling what the first line shows. This is just my very humble opinion, of course...

6:28 PM  
Blogger Georgia said...

Mmmmm... Wow, I think it is getting hot in here, or is it just me??? Ummm, yeah, I think i need to go wake up my hubby now! ; )

I love it!

xoxo
Georgia

8:14 AM  

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