PG-13 Poetry ~*~ Virgin Cactus ~*~
I once read an article a long time ago on Georgia O'Keeffe, mentioning that she found flowers to be very sexual looking. I was young and got embarrassed the next time I saw one of her paintings. Recently, while browsing through the bookstore, I saw some poetry put to her art. I became intrigued and wondered Hhmmmmm...I can do that *blush* so, here is my first attempt at PG-13 poetry.
~*~ Virgin Cactus ~*~
Long after the first rain
I saw the pearls you captured
between your satin skin
and many jagged tines
I suddenly felt parched
my skin desired moisture
a craving turned to want
a tightening in my muscles
But I know the ache
that touching you requires
a piercing penetration
and the sting you'll leave behind
~*~ Virgin Cactus ~*~
Long after the first rain
I saw the pearls you captured
between your satin skin
and many jagged tines
I suddenly felt parched
my skin desired moisture
a craving turned to want
a tightening in my muscles
But I know the ache
that touching you requires
a piercing penetration
and the sting you'll leave behind
posted by Darlene at
12:01 AM
22 Comments:
Your right you can do it.
That is amazing.
I love it really Love it.
xoxo :)
WOW! Shaz is right, you can indeed do it. The pictures so perfectly accompany the poem, and so much is said in such a few lines.
Beautiful!
xoxoxoxox
Gettin' us all hot and bothered! This is fabulous, darlin'. GORGEOUS. Thanks for being willing to be vulnerable and share :)
Wow... *giggle*
Explicit stuff here! It's great.
I love the photos and how they zoom out while your words 'zoom in'!
I love this new facet of yours that we're seeing here.
Vx
xoxox
Ouch!
Your cactus has sure got a prickle to it, Darlene- captures the bittersweet longings of desire just perfectly.
Great photos too...When are you going professional?!!
love x x x x x
Yep, you did it all right! You captured perfectly that sense of knowing something (or someone!) is going to bring you pain, but being so overwhelmed with desire that in that one moment you must have it anyway. Hot! :-)
OH yes, you can do this!!! Very very good. You are amazing. What a wonderful piece of art to read before I am off to work. Have a spectacular day Dar! Maybe you should spend today finding a publisher? Hmmm, just a thought :)
xxxxoooo
Teresa
Ooooooh. Will we be seeing you next to Georgie O'Keefe in the book stores soon?
mmmmm... :)
this is shiveringly wonderful, darlene. i agree with everything everybody has saying - you are a talent to be reckoned with...purr.
hi sweetie.
come see my contestants this week... they'll add a smile to your lovely face as well.
and yesh, as your fellow supporters state so adamenently, you CAN do it.
<< hugs >>
"PG-13 poetry" - I love it!
Very sexy stuff, girl, very sexy indeed.
oh d.
oh this is great.
there's nothing i love more than my girl georgia o-
and it's so beautiful that she inspired your sexy words!
Blogger is vexing me with commenting today.
I will just say that my original comment was more effusive and I like what you've done here. Great job, Darlene!
Very evocative! Brilliant job, Dar. How fun it is to push yourself as a poet ... love the passion - xoxo, d
I have never seen a sexy poem featuring cactus photos. I don't think the two typically go together, which makes it all the more interesting.
i also think it was clever to interwine an image of a cactus with sensuality and what it can bring up for some people.
and i smiled at the "PG-13" warning. ; )
love you sis.
hello again darling...
shhhhhh backatcha - it's actually a PIKA. a subspecies of the common field mouse, tho heavily um... padded against cold weather in the foothills of asia and other some regions in north america...
(more commonly mistaken for the canadian version, which of course is more difficult to pronounce: pika-eh)
giggle
Very sensual and sensitive and beautiful all at the same time.
Phew! I've got to go COOL off! LOL Hey! West Virginia's winning the Backyard Brawl!!! Woooo Hoooo! I LOVE Georgia!!!too! LOVE her red, RED poppy! Way to go Darlene! Hot, hot, HOT!!! Reminds me of that silly song, "I'm too sexy"
Okay, I'm only saying this because you said you wanted my critique, so:
I suddenly felt parched
my skin desired moisture
a craving turned to want
a tightening in my muscles
I think you could drop those last three lines and just leave it at feeling parched. To me that line is the absolute best, the heart of the poem, and you don't need the rest - it's just telling what that first line shows so very well:
Long after the first rain
I saw the pearls you captured
between your satin skin
and many jagged tines
I suddenly felt parched
But I know the ache
that touching you requires
a piercing penetration
and the sting you'll leave behind
Those other lines are just telling what the first line shows. This is just my very humble opinion, of course...
Mmmmm... Wow, I think it is getting hot in here, or is it just me??? Ummm, yeah, I think i need to go wake up my hubby now! ; )
I love it!
xoxo
Georgia
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